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i.
i tried to think of pain as a flower,
first it blossoms

  and then

  it wilts away.

but i won't let myself disappear
along with it,

i won't
give you that.


(it's not the agony that makes
me scream, it's the flavor).


ii.
and you whispered softly
"i'll rip your heart out and replace it

with a song,

it's christmas soon, and
we should celebrate".

  you've always used my scars
  as a calendar,

  as a way to remind yourself

  "today is tuesday

  and i still exist".

iii.
(it's morning now because
i can see
the sunlight

through my eyelids

and imagine
a bright summer day,

the flowers are
beautiful,

so
damn

beautiful).
Don't forget to water my plants while I'm gone...

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Given 2012-12-21
The emotion just bleeds from the words as they blend into one another, making it impossible to stop reading says the suggester. we should celebrate is by ~EternalSunday ( Suggested by LadyofGaerdon and Featured by Nichrysalis )
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BlueDiamondSnow Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Some of the lines in your poetry are so novel and exquisite: 
you've always used my scars   as a calendar; 

(it's not the agony that makes
me scream, it's the flavor).

Holy crap! You are an amazing writer! 
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EternalSunday Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much!
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DuchesseOfDusk Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Very touching poem. I like it :)
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EternalSunday Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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HaveTales-WillTell Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013  Professional Writer
I managed to miss this the first time through. And almost missed it again the second time around.

You've presented the essence of an abusive relationship with a metaphor that's as lovely as it is disturbing.
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EternalSunday Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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IAstartov Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2012
Great work, like how it sounds.
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EternalSunday Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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KuraiTenshiV Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Hobbyist
this is nice, good imagery
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EternalSunday Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
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